Target Audience feedback- Halfway through

We received feedback from a mixture of boys and girls half way through our production. This part we had only filmed part of the performance with no concept and this is what people said they liked and disliked. For the first improvement, a boy said how he wanted to see more people within the video because shots of the artist can get a bit repetitive. This can be resolved when we complete all our filming and add in conceptual ideas. Another person said how the time lapping could have created some confusion as some shots were from the beggining and some from the front. From this Ellie and I have decided we are going to have the first 20 seconds will create a attitude of the artist, as all the shots will be from behind, creating questions of who this artist may be and then the next 16 seconds will be the artist being established from the front. The lighting that first girl talks about is when the artist has the stars and rain projected on her. We chose to add a few seconds of this projection because all the other projections were happy and bright colours. This meant that by adding a darker projection, the backgrounds would stop being repetitive. When we received feedback that the artist smiled too much, we decided that will change our opening scene based on Miley Cyrus' music video of Wrecking Ball. The beginning of her video its just a close up of her face that really shows the emotion. This concentrates less on the artist dancing and more on the emotion and ability to lip sync to the viewer. The bits that contain the black shots are the parts that haven't yet been filmed. This was the video that the people above had previously watched in order to give their feedback.

Feedback on song and genre

Peer Assessment

Frankie Sims
13th November
WWW: clear description of chosen costume and why.
EBI: you could put more images of the costume in and maybe where you got the inspiration from.

Frankie Sims
21st October
Presentation is really effective and clear. Every heading has a lot of detail. Probably could do with more target audience research.


Frankie Sims
21st October
Your enthusiasm makes it more effective. The lip syncing is on point.

Frankie Sims
21st October
Good job but could do with a better description of what the theory actually is.

Frankie Sims
21st October
you should write how good this feed back is for your ideas and how it has helped you improve.

Frankie Sims
21st October
Ideas are really good, good inspirations; gives the audience a clear description of the idea your trying to put across

Frankie Sims
21st October
Good job, detailed thorough description. make sure you don't write lots on one day and then just a sentence on another. keep it all detailed

Teachers Feedback

13th November
Mr Anstee
Ellie

An excellent first day of filming, this looks great. Useful still shots of settings and the first day of filming; I like the "good/ bad" examples.

Next, aim to develop your explanation and evaluation a little further. Link your comments back to your plans/ audience/ genre. Make clear why you were using each of the effects you created in the sports hall and then evaluate how successful they were/ how they show progress/ what you have learnt. In places, you seem to follow conventions and in other places you seem to challenge them - this is great, even greater if you explain how and why!

Mr A

We decided not to use the first shot because the artist looks uncomfortable and unnatural in the shot (which doesn't conform to the conventions of the genre, because within our genre the artist should be passionate and lively about their own song, which is what our artist doesn't portray.). We also feel that the artist standing there makes the viewer focus more on the actual artist rather than the shadow singing those lines of the lyrics. 
The bad shot of the artist in the red back ground wasn't effective because the artist was too far over to the right and would have made it difficult for the viewer to see exactly who the artist is. Especially because these shot have the short duration of only 1 second anyway. The shot of the water being projected on to the artist and the stars, was bad because you couldn't see the mouth movement clearly enough whist she was lip syncing. Whereas, the pink cloud projection, you can clearly see the artist's face, which also attract to the target the audience because they want to see the artist fully, especially if they're are new to the industry. 

Filming day 2

This is our first setting, here we filmed the intro and also a lot for the end shots. It was a good day and so we did a pan shot from the bright blue sky to the setting to slowly establish the setting and what she is doing. Putting Paiges hair in a bandana it makes her look more alternative and it is also good for when we first establish her as you can clearly see her face. We also used Doc martens, high black socks and a baggy shirt. This is because we wanted to take inspiration from the 'Skins' character 'Effy'.

This was our second setting of the day, it is a bridge over a A-road. At first it looked good but once we started filming we didn't like the shots as we felt like they were very typical and not very interesting. This outfit look is cut out boots with frilly socks, high waisted shorts, a T-shirt and a messy pony tail which has a hair cuff and also a hair chain in it. We felt like this went well with our artist as we were keeping it alternative.

Setting 3 is at 'south weald' it is a brick staircase which is very rustic. We kept the outfit the same as the second setting but we decided to put her hair down to change it up and keep the shots different.

Settings

These are photos of some of our settings, we did research on google maps and Google to see the location before we went there.  The last shot is of our set-up for the projection shots.

Costume inspiration

Costume inspiration

Here you can see some of our costume inspiration from celebrities and fashion icons. We wanted to go with a funky urban vibe but keep it fashionable instead of messy and plain. To do this we will mix colours and textures, including shirts and socks and lace.