Frankie Sims
13th November
WWW: clear description of chosen costume and why.
EBI: you could put more images of the costume in and maybe where you got the inspiration from.
Frankie Sims
21st October
Presentation is really effective and clear. Every heading has a lot of detail. Probably could do with more target audience research.
Frankie Sims
21st October
Your enthusiasm makes it more effective. The lip syncing is on point.
Frankie Sims
21st October
Good job but could do with a better description of what the theory actually is.
Frankie Sims
21st October
you should write how good this feed back is for your ideas and how it has helped you improve.
Frankie Sims
21st October
Ideas are really good, good inspirations; gives the audience a clear description of the idea your trying to put across
Frankie Sims
21st October
Good job, detailed thorough description. make sure you don't write lots on one day and then just a sentence on another. keep it all detailed
Showing posts with label Assessment. Show all posts
Showing posts with label Assessment. Show all posts
Thursday, 14 November 2013
Teachers Feedback
13th November
Mr Anstee
Ellie
An excellent first day of filming, this looks great. Useful still shots of settings and the first day of filming; I like the "good/ bad" examples.
Next, aim to develop your explanation and evaluation a little further. Link your comments back to your plans/ audience/ genre. Make clear why you were using each of the effects you created in the sports hall and then evaluate how successful they were/ how they show progress/ what you have learnt. In places, you seem to follow conventions and in other places you seem to challenge them - this is great, even greater if you explain how and why!
Mr A
We decided not to use the first shot because the artist looks uncomfortable and unnatural in the shot (which doesn't conform to the conventions of the genre, because within our genre the artist should be passionate and lively about their own song, which is what our artist doesn't portray.). We also feel that the artist standing there makes the viewer focus more on the actual artist rather than the shadow singing those lines of the lyrics.
The bad shot of the artist in the red back ground wasn't effective because the artist was too far over to the right and would have made it difficult for the viewer to see exactly who the artist is. Especially because these shot have the short duration of only 1 second anyway. The shot of the water being projected on to the artist and the stars, was bad because you couldn't see the mouth movement clearly enough whist she was lip syncing. Whereas, the pink cloud projection, you can clearly see the artist's face, which also attract to the target the audience because they want to see the artist fully, especially if they're are new to the industry.
Mr Anstee
Ellie
An excellent first day of filming, this looks great. Useful still shots of settings and the first day of filming; I like the "good/ bad" examples.
Next, aim to develop your explanation and evaluation a little further. Link your comments back to your plans/ audience/ genre. Make clear why you were using each of the effects you created in the sports hall and then evaluate how successful they were/ how they show progress/ what you have learnt. In places, you seem to follow conventions and in other places you seem to challenge them - this is great, even greater if you explain how and why!
Mr A
We decided not to use the first shot because the artist looks uncomfortable and unnatural in the shot (which doesn't conform to the conventions of the genre, because within our genre the artist should be passionate and lively about their own song, which is what our artist doesn't portray.). We also feel that the artist standing there makes the viewer focus more on the actual artist rather than the shadow singing those lines of the lyrics.
The bad shot of the artist in the red back ground wasn't effective because the artist was too far over to the right and would have made it difficult for the viewer to see exactly who the artist is. Especially because these shot have the short duration of only 1 second anyway. The shot of the water being projected on to the artist and the stars, was bad because you couldn't see the mouth movement clearly enough whist she was lip syncing. Whereas, the pink cloud projection, you can clearly see the artist's face, which also attract to the target the audience because they want to see the artist fully, especially if they're are new to the industry.
Monday, 21 October 2013
Peer assesment
Treatment- Presentation is really effective and clear. Every heading has a lot of detail. Probably could do with more target audience research.
Peer assesed by Frankie Sims
Lip synching- Your enthusiasm makes it more effective. The lip syncing is on point. Peer assessed by Frankie Sims
Goodwins theory- Good job but could do with a better description of what the theory actually is.
Peer assessed by Frankie Sims
Peer assesed by Frankie Sims
Lip synching- Your enthusiasm makes it more effective. The lip syncing is on point. Peer assessed by Frankie Sims
Goodwins theory- Good job but could do with a better description of what the theory actually is.
Peer assessed by Frankie Sims
Music video feedback-you should write how good this feed back is for your ideas and how it has helped you improve.
Peer assessed by Frankie Sims
Music video ideas- Ideas are really good, good inspirations; gives the audience a clear description of the idea your trying to put across.
Peer assessed by Frankie Sims
Production diary- Good job, detailed thorough description. make sure you don't write lots on one day and then just a sentence on another. keep it all detailed.
Peer assessed by Frankie Sims
Subscribe to:
Posts (Atom)